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A boy with a hat
peace on you frinds as usual ..this is brand new writing not too evil for light of dawn sake :angel: she seems too kind to frighten her with evil :006: so ..lets begin ....................... ....................... To sing that song .. You won't take long It's a song of a tale Maybe true ..or wrong About that rose That evil rose What a cold heart No warm she shows Her maid was a boy He was wearing a hat To hide his looks ..to bury his heart Our evil princess Used to call him the rat One day in the castle In that fancy room ((remove that ..dirty hunts Away ..a way Is that’s a beautiful scene ..to start a day )) our rat was there ((what a magical eyes What a charming bloom )) Just when she walked a way They start the doom Now tell me your opinion on all of that You need to know ..there was a boy with hat ………………… Days and days What's the rule she plays That beautiful rich That evil beast ..which is which The people bored No more patience to hold The castle was destroyed And she was there In the lock of regret Among that ugly walls Dark and wet Chained by blood and crimes But there was a choice From a voice She used to ignore All these times Here come the spring The bells will ring A after the devil will killed Again we will build Did you hear all that My point is ..there was a boy with a hat …………….. Years and years But with out change The same darkness with different age there was whisper From ear to ear of course all of us had to share ((they killed a person Wasn't there aim Can that be true There wasn't some one Looks the same And every one Said there was a ghost Every day ..walks on the cost What doesi t look for Just for more I don,t want ..who was wrong or right His only goal ..to see her smiles Its pleasure his soul ..close up the miles That tale of the winter's fire About the sad ...love and desire I don't want ..who was wrong or right The important thing ..we will take in sight That boy was missing …that boy with the hat an that,s all I hope you liked it see ya :evil_lol: |
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Welcome my sister How are you? I hope you're in good mood Let's start I liked the beginning a lot because it gave a good introduction to the poem The boy description was perfect The girl was exploitative But it seems that the boy was trying to satisfy her selfishness The end of the poem were not the beautiful as the beginning of the poem I'm sorry I wished that you're good mood for my opinion Hahahahaha I think the boy has served this girl until the end Great poem God bless you my sister Bye:icon31: |
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thank you very much my dear
Days and days very butiful poem What's the rule she plays That beautiful rich That evil beast ..which is which The people bored No more patience to hold The castle was destroyed And she was there In the lock of regret Among that ugly walls very butiful words we weating your new se you |
رد: A boy with a hat
وعليكم السلام ورحمة الله .. ماشاء الله تبارك الرحمن .. وانا اللي قلت لازم لي اول رد .. XPP خيو احمد ..:icon28: im kidding .. منووورة الصفحة خيو ..^^ .. الموضوع ما ينفع اعلق عليه بكلمتين .. ابدااا لي عودة ... ... >> > baaack welcome sis .. after i read this topic .. i wonder... how you get all of this evill XDD masha allah on your Imagination how wonderful .. how scare .. is it enough to describe it but wait there is more .. let me see mmm.. all of what you wrote .. i liked it from the first letter to the last lettrs but what interesting me .. more than any thing.. when you described the well .. blood .. wet and dark and so on its really whats surprised me masha allah on you ^^ and what else .. the last chapter .. really i want to response on word word .. but i think this will annoyed you >< ماشاء الله .. كان شامل و مكمل لكل اللي قلتيه واكثر جزء شرير ومرعب كان هو لو كل شي يعيد ويزيد .. القلعة ترجع تنبني .. وضاحايا ثانين يجو .. >> what the .... but its too much اعتقد اني استمتعت اكثر شي بهذا الجزء sooooo beautiful.. sooo evil ^^ mmmm... with that .. i knew he was kindlly .. cause.. as you said His only goal ..to see her smiles after all..i think i can forgive him and with smile too i felt by his kindness from this sentence >< حبيت الولد كثير .. تسالت عن سبب وجوده في البداية واكتشفت ان ما كان حيمشي شي بدونه .. ^^ يا اااااخ.. i liked this boy ^^ i want to complite ..really i enjoyed .. a lot a lot a lot but .. اعتقد اني طولت كفاية >< thanks a lot sis coc ^^ ايش العقل الشرير اللي مخبيته خيتو .. حبيت الفكرة كثير خيتو .. الف شكر لابداعك حماكي المولى ورعاكي انتظر جديدك بفارغ الصبر |
رد: A boy with a hat
[QUOTE=ضوء الفجر;726218]
وعليكم السلام ورحمة الله .. ماشاء الله تبارك الرحمن .. وانا اللي قلت لازم لي اول رد .. XPP خيو احمد ..:icon28: im kidding .. منووورة الصفحة خيو ..^^ I'm sorry my sister :sweatdrop:Hahahahaha You are the first no doubt And Your comment is the most beautiful Wait for your comment on the poem God bless you |
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تم فك الحجز .. ^^
QUOTE] I'm sorry my sister :sweatdrop:Hahahahaha You are the first no doubt And Your comment is the most beautiful Wait for your comment on the poem God bless you [/QUOTE] haha.. لا ماينفع خلاص .. :icon28: جاري وضعك في القائمة السوداء .. im kidding bro ^^ thanks a lot بالعكس خيو .. ماشاء الله انت من الاعضاء المميزين اللي استنى ردودهم والجميع يشهد لك بتميزك وردودك الجميلة والداعمة بارك الله فيك ^^ |
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:shiny01: see ya |
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اقتباس:
ما بعرف كيف اشكرك على ذوقك تسلميلي :thumbup: |
رد: A boy with a hat
شكراً مس كوكو
على اكلام الجميل سلمت الأنامل الذهبية على الابداع الراقي ..~ |
رد: A boy with a hat
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تسلميلي على الرد الذهبي افوقه مشكوره عالمرور :blush-anim-cl: |
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